Evaluation of rough cut and Changes to be made

Reflections / Things to Do on the Real Shoot

- Synchronise the beginning of the sequence to the music
- Film everything for longer, especially the cutaways at the beginning to help create a slower continuity sequence
- Film the pans steadily (so they can be slowed down in editing)
- Shot of Dawn looking at the dawn outside window
- Signifiers of what caused the struggle / death throughout sequence (moved furniture/stain/wine or broken glass on the floor)
- Remake music so that it fits (start from beginning after the bass)

We have changed our storyboard, shot list and props list to compensate for the longer shots and the altered setting (messier to signify a fight)

Rough Cut Feedback

Feedback from DYM
-Face reveal before body
-Beam of light makes her snap out of it
-Less shots at the beginning, but each shot lasting longer
-Dissolve montage at beginning of sequence
-Dissolve > abstract body / leaning forwards > cutaways
-Some cutaways aren't necessary e.g. furniture
-Signifiers as to the cause of the fight
-How does he die? Wouldn't the bottle have broken?
-Narrative details need to be addressed; murder weapon, etc.


Feedback from BLK
-Phone sequence is good
-Nice music
-Nice acting
-Some nice shots
-Liked the story
-Every arty shot must have purpose / ending / reward use more camera movements to create flow
-Reveal murder weapon e.g. after lamp, run-on to him or glasses
give reveal for glass shot and window shot
-Idea of having her mundane activities, pat down cushion, pick up glass, look out window, look at watch - emphasise dawn
-Possibly sit back down, fade to black, come up again whilst she's still sitting - shows passing of time
-Lighting get rid of harsh ceiling light

Rough Cut of Sequence

Rough Edit:

Behind The Scenes of our First Test Shoot

On our first test shoot, I brought my own camera and tripod to film some of what went on behind the scenes. This is just one of the shots we took.

Reflections on Test shoot 1

+ We'd done all the shots we planned to do with time to spare! So we improvised some shots at the end of our 2nd 4 hour session. This should give us more variety and options when editing.

+ Our actor Nima quickly understood what he had to do and we got his shots over and done with pretty quickly.


 -We filmed the dialogue and the person answering phone with 'Hello?' using the shotgun microphone on the camera but they may not have come out clearly.

- For the curtain shot we needed the light outside to be bright, we thought this would be earlier in the day but in fact it was brightest around midday.

- Also as we only used the paglights some of the time, this may affect continuity . We'll have to be more wary of lighting issues for the next shoot...but we'll find out what we need to change once we've edited the sequence!

Test Shoot Breakdown

-Arrived at location and set up the scene, thought about lighting and tried out a shot
-Actor arrived, explained expectations and aims, did all his shots first
-Did the last sequence and phone shots from different distances
-Had a break for lunch
-Finished off all our storyboard shots
-Did quality control for all our shots so far and recharged camera
-Started experimenting with cutaways and new shot ideas
-Re-did lighting shot and added in reaction cutaway
-Did another quality control
-Checked there was nothing more to add improve or do and checked our equipment and packed away carefully

In this test shoot we wanted to test out the arty style of our idea and experiment with creative close ups and framing. We also wanted to test out our idea of a dissolve in editing so took a shot with that idea in mind. We also played around with the manual focus.

We will later test out these theories/shot types in editing and then improve them or scrap them for when we do our re-shoot.

Our Storyboard

Group Meeting 4 - 04/02 - 30 Minutes

Although we already had our group meeting this week on the Tuesday 2nd February, we decided that we needed another group meeting to finalise our initial script and prop / costume lists.

Below is the first draft of our script:


Below are the props and costume lists for what we will need in the test shoot:

Group Meeting 3 - 02/02 - 60 Minutes

In this meeting, we felt as though we really had to start drawing our storyboard and preapre for our test shoot. We had secured our actor, location and equipment hire. we now need to do a shot list and storyboard of what specfic shots we are going to shoot such as:

Pan across body and floor

Tilt up from foot to knee

Above, the pink rectangle is a stand-in title. As it is an opening sequence we thought it was best design some shots with the intention of outting titles on them - so it was important to leave space.